[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 1/9] bibliography: update 404 link

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 1/9] bibliography: update 404 link

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 pve-bibliography.adoc | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/pve-bibliography.adoc b/pve-bibliography.adoc
index 168c94e..f8064fc 100644
--- a/pve-bibliography.adoc
+++ b/pve-bibliography.adoc
@@ -37,7 +37,7 @@ endif::manvolnum[]
 .Books about related technology
 
 - [[[Hertzog13]]] Raphaël Hertzog & Roland Mas.
-  https://debian-handbook.info/download/stable/debian-handbook.pdf[The Debian Administrator\'s Handbook: Debian Jessie from Discovery to Mastery],
+  https://debian-handbook.info/get[The Debian Administrator\'s Handbook: Debian Jessie from Discovery to Mastery],
   Freexian, 2013.
   ISBN 979-1091414050
   
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 2/9] package-repos: fix typos

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 pve-package-repos.adoc | 4 ++--
 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-)

diff --git a/pve-package-repos.adoc b/pve-package-repos.adoc
index 3237ddf..52169a0 100644
--- a/pve-package-repos.adoc
+++ b/pve-package-repos.adoc
@@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ deb http://security.debian.org/debian-security bullseye-security main contrib
 
 This repository contains the latest packages and is primarily used by developers
 to test new features. To configure it, add the following line to
-`etc/apt/sources.list`:
+`/etc/apt/sources.list`:
 
 .sources.list entry for `pvetest`
 ----
@@ -176,7 +176,7 @@ deb http://download.proxmox.com/debian/ceph-pacific bullseye test
 Ceph Octopus Repository
 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
 
-NOTE: Ceph Octopus (15.2) was declared stable with {pve} 6.3 it will continue
+NOTE: Ceph Octopus (15.2) was declared stable with {pve} 6.3. It will continue
 to get updates for the xref:faq-support-table[remaining life time of the 6.x release]
 and also for {pve} 7.x until Ceph Octopus upstream EOL (~ 2022-07).
 
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 3/9] network: fix typo

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 pve-network.adoc | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/pve-network.adoc b/pve-network.adoc
index 85779b6..ed96d8e 100644
--- a/pve-network.adoc
+++ b/pve-network.adoc
@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ xref:sysadmin_network_masquerading['NAT'] setups.
 The xref:chapter_pvesdn[Software Defined Network] is an option for more complex
 virtual networks in {pve} clusters.
 
-WARNING: It's discourage to use the Debian traditional tools `ifup` and `ifdown`
+WARNING: It's discouraged to use the traditional Debian tools `ifup` and `ifdown`
 if unsure, as they have some pitfalls like interupting all guest traffic on
 `ifdown vmbrX` but not reconnecting those guest again when doing `ifup` on the
 same bridge later.
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 4/9] network: fix dead link

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 pve-network.adoc | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/pve-network.adoc b/pve-network.adoc
index ed96d8e..0e94f28 100644
--- a/pve-network.adoc
+++ b/pve-network.adoc
@@ -267,7 +267,7 @@ https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Netfilter-packet-flow.svg[Netfilter Pack
 
 https://lwn.net/Articles/370152/[Patch on netdev-list introducing conntrack zones]
 
-https://blog.lobraun.de/2019/05/19/prox/[Blog post with a good explanation by using TRACE in the raw table]
+https://web.archive.org/web/20220610151210/https://blog.lobraun.de/2019/05/19/prox/[Blog post with a good explanation by using TRACE in the raw table]
 
 
 [[sysadmin_network_bond]]
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 5/9] local-lvm: typo fix/better phrasing

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 local-lvm.adoc | 5 ++---
 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-)

diff --git a/local-lvm.adoc b/local-lvm.adoc
index 6abdee8..8092bb8 100644
--- a/local-lvm.adoc
+++ b/local-lvm.adoc
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@ endif::wiki[]
 
 Most people install {pve} directly on a local disk. The {pve}
 installation CD offers several options for local disk management, and
-the current default setup uses LVM. The installer let you select a
+the current default setup uses LVM. The installer lets you select a
 single disk for such setup, and uses that disk as physical volume for
 the **V**olume **G**roup (VG) `pve`. The following output is from a
 test installation using a small 8GB disk:
@@ -120,8 +120,7 @@ To make it always accessible add the following line in `/etc/fstab`.
 Resizing the thin pool
 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
 
-Resize the LV and the metadata pool can be achieved with the following
-command.
+Resize the LV and the metadata pool with the following command:
 
  # lvresize --size +<size[\M,G,T]> --poolmetadatasize +<size[\M,G]> <VG>/<LVThin_pool>
 
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 6/9] local-zfs Remove SSD suggestion as it's outdated

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 local-zfs.adoc | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/local-zfs.adoc b/local-zfs.adoc
index d3db1c5..6afc110 100644
--- a/local-zfs.adoc
+++ b/local-zfs.adoc
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ practice, use as much as you can get for your hardware/budget. To prevent
 data corruption, we recommend the use of high quality ECC RAM.
 
 If you use a dedicated cache and/or log disk, you should use an
-enterprise class SSD (e.g. Intel SSD DC S3700 Series). This can
+enterprise class SSD. This can
 increase the overall performance significantly.
 
 IMPORTANT: Do not use ZFS on top of a hardware RAID controller which has its
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 7/9] local-zfs: rephrase ZFS RAID description

[Matthias Heiserer]

I tried to make the performance impact clearer, as what "behave like a number of disks"
actually means wasn't quite clear to me.

Use "in regard to" rather than "in regard of", as I couldn't find
any source that this phrase is (commonly) used in modern english.

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 local-zfs.adoc | 10 +++++-----
 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-)

diff --git a/local-zfs.adoc b/local-zfs.adoc
index 6afc110..0fa06b0 100644
--- a/local-zfs.adoc
+++ b/local-zfs.adoc
@@ -167,17 +167,17 @@ Each `vdev` type has different performance behaviors. The two
 parameters of interest are the IOPS (Input/Output Operations per Second) and
 the bandwidth with which data can be written or read.
 
-A 'mirror' vdev (RAID1) will approximately behave like a single disk in regards
-to both parameters when writing data. When reading data if will behave like the
-number of disks in the mirror.
+A 'mirror' vdev (RAID1) will approximately behave like a single disk in regard
+to both parameters when writing data. When reading data the performance will
+scale linearly with the number of disks in the mirror.
 
 A common situation is to have 4 disks. When setting it up as 2 mirror vdevs
 (RAID10) the pool will have the write characteristics as two single disks in
-regard of IOPS and bandwidth. For read operations it will resemble 4 single
+regard to IOPS and bandwidth. For read operations it will resemble 4 single
 disks.
 
 A 'RAIDZ' of any redundancy level will approximately behave like a single disk
-in regard of IOPS with a lot of bandwidth. How much bandwidth depends on the
+in regard to IOPS with a lot of bandwidth. How much bandwidth depends on the
 size of the RAIDZ vdev and the redundancy level.
 
 For running VMs, IOPS is the more important metric in most situations.
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 8/9] local-zfs: typo fix/better phrasing

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 local-zfs.adoc | 6 +++---
 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-)

diff --git a/local-zfs.adoc b/local-zfs.adoc
index 0fa06b0..34eb06b 100644
--- a/local-zfs.adoc
+++ b/local-zfs.adoc
@@ -235,7 +235,7 @@ There are a few options to counter the increased use of space:
 The `volblocksize` property can only be set when creating a ZVOL. The default
 value can be changed in the storage configuration. When doing this, the guest
 needs to be tuned accordingly and depending on the use case, the problem of
-write amplification if just moved from the ZFS layer up to the guest.
+write amplification is just moved from the ZFS layer up to the guest.
 
 Using `ashift=9` when creating the pool can lead to bad
 performance, depending on the disks underneath, and cannot be changed later on.
@@ -406,8 +406,8 @@ As `<device>` it is possible to use more devices, like it's shown in
 Add cache and log to an existing pool
 ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
 
-If you have a pool without cache and log. First partition the SSD in
-2 partition with `parted` or `gdisk`
+If you have a pool without cache and log, first create 2 partitions on the SSD
+with `parted` or `gdisk`.
 
 IMPORTANT: Always use GPT partition tables.
 
-- 
2.30.2

[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 9/9] Update ExtJS version

[Matthias Heiserer]

Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
---
 pve-gui.adoc | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/pve-gui.adoc b/pve-gui.adoc
index 3fee2e0..eec6feb 100644
--- a/pve-gui.adoc
+++ b/pve-gui.adoc
@@ -47,7 +47,7 @@ Features
 
 * Two-Factor Authentication (OATH, Yubikey)
 
-* Based on ExtJS 6.x JavaScript framework
+* Based on ExtJS 7.x JavaScript framework
 
 
 Login
-- 
2.30.2

Re: [pve-devel] [PATCH docs 1/9] bibliography: update 404 link

[Thomas Lamprecht]

Am 18/11/2022 um 12:09 schrieb Matthias Heiserer:
> Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
> ---
>  pve-bibliography.adoc | 2 +-
>  1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)
> 
> diff --git a/pve-bibliography.adoc b/pve-bibliography.adoc
> index 168c94e..f8064fc 100644
> --- a/pve-bibliography.adoc
> +++ b/pve-bibliography.adoc
> @@ -37,7 +37,7 @@ endif::manvolnum[]
>  .Books about related technology
>  
>  - [[[Hertzog13]]] Raphaël Hertzog & Roland Mas.
> -  https://debian-handbook.info/download/stable/debian-handbook.pdf[The Debian Administrator\'s Handbook: Debian Jessie from Discovery to Mastery],
> +  https://debian-handbook.info/get[The Debian Administrator\'s Handbook: Debian Jessie from Discovery to Mastery],

Jessie isn't exactly up to date either ;-)

>    Freexian, 2013.
>    ISBN 979-1091414050

I updated above meta info (ISBN, title, copyright) in a follow up

[pve-devel] applied-series: [PATCH docs 1/9] bibliography: update 404 link

[Thomas Lamprecht]

Am 18/11/2022 um 12:09 schrieb Matthias Heiserer:
> Signed-off-by: Matthias Heiserer <m.heiserer@proxmox.com>
> ---
>  pve-bibliography.adoc | 2 +-
>  1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)
> 
>

applied series, thanks!